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In the waiting
hope eludes me
Grasping, clinging to memories
made of sand sifted by fate
The hour glass suffocates
all prospects
Dressed in ethereal
death dominates
Absence chokes
any future
In the waiting
I submerge into oblivion.
**written by petra michelle**
18 comments:
A profound sense of yearning here.....waiting can be truly tortuous.
Lavinia: It can be interminable!
"The hour glass suffocates
all prospects"
That's a gorgeous line!
Are you alright? I wish I could write.... but to bare ones soul, ones feelings puts it out there for all to see. Who is looking?
Mama Zen: Thank you! :))
Webber: One of my darker pieces.
Baring one's soul is truly cathartic yet humbling.
That painting sure looks like what you're saying. Do you paint it?
No... I see a name on it. Okay.
That's some poem.
WOW! You are very talented girl!
And ah! If I were oblivion!
Anonymous: I found this painting online which I thought truly reflected the tone of the poem.
No, I didn't paint it. Carmen Cilliers did. Thank you. :))
Tammy: Aw shucks, you tell that to all your friends! ;) Thank you, Lady! :))
Chandini: I knew you'd understand!
:))
waiting...yes...then one tires of waiting, takes a laugh at fate, and runs off on ones own....albeit sometimes only to run into fate again....but oh the fun of it.
Great poem! I really liked it.
PV: I really enjoyed your twist on it! You've helped lift the doom and gloom of it! :))
Thank goodness, I was worried something incredibly life threatening was hanging over your head, like an aids test or something. I mean, I know it means a lot to you, but I thought maybe, like wow...you know...bad... as you can see, I am NOT a writer. But getting better at it. Hope you get what you want, and thanks for the music tips.
Webber: Omg, no! But thank you for your concern, though needless. I'm in great health and spirits, although this poem was unusually dark for me.
Am looking forward to hearing your playlist!
Anyone who has ever set in the waiting room of a hospital could so relate to this one-I can-and it fits perfectly!
Tipper: Absolutely! Have been there with both parents countless times! Thank you, dear lady! :))
I always appreciate your writing style. Seems gloomy at first but I sense more...... A great poem!
oh no I am there have been there, hope this week is called emergence hah - you sound like love has passed by through your own misunderstandings or like me I expected it to be perfect and it never is ....Sigh
Blog Stalker: Thank you! :))
Sandy: Amazing how many different interpretations. Why I love poetry so much! It seems to cover the gamut! Emergence is a great theme for the next, (((Sandy)))!
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